revision worksheet for the Toulmin essay
Instructions: Use the revision paper to answer these questions. I have attached the original paper you did for me. Use this paper to answer these questions.
This revision worksheet has three parts.
Part One (33% of grade):
Address the following two prompts in informal paragraphs (led by a claim and backed up by supporting details, totaling 4-6 sentences).
1) What is the big claim in your first draft (of the Tolumin essay) and how do each of your paragraphs help prove that big claim? Be specific in mapping out the relationship. If there is not a strong one, point out how and why the relationship is breaking down.
2) How do the three body paragraphs in the first draft relate to each other? Think about the different Tolumin pieces when you answer as these pieces describe the parts and relationships within a good argument! Be specific in mapping out the relationship. If there is not a strong one, point out how and why the relationship is breaking down.
Part three (33% of grade):
Go into the resources folder and answer all questions on the following slides within the powerpoint called revision workshop
(you will find this under files):
* chunking
* transitions
Part 3 (final 33%):
Use the same revision workshop slides but go into those entitled introductions and conclusions. Answer all questions there, culminating in outlines (not drafts) for an introduction and a conclusion. As we will see in class, intros and conclusions are not previews or reviews of what happens in the body. They are frames, heightening the significance and contextualizing the body, adding depth and meaning to it, kind of like when you put an important photo into a beautiful frame.
Closing remarks:
Make sure to answer the questions thoroughly and not to draft. Overall, I want to see you thinking about the questions that I am asking in the worksheet and above. I do not want to see more essay writing / drafting. This is the time for planning and re-planning, not the time for writing. Once our plans our good, writing gets clear and easy. If you just write for me now, you will likely make the same mistakes as the first draft!