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Radical Rewrite:
Weak Request Response Requires Your Revision
Submit your one to two-page recommendations double spaced Word compatible file to the Canvas drop box by answering the following questions:
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Analyze the writing of this email based on tone, style, or design. (25 points)
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Evaluate it based on the principles for effective emails & list at least five errors. (25 points)
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Revise this email to make it more readable. (25 points)
4.
Grammar (25 points: Please ensure that you follow these simple rules:
You MUST include your name! No name on document = 10 points penalty!
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Document MUST be left justified in a
portrait format
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Black (no other color!) 12 point Times New Roman or Arial typeface only. (Five (5) point penalty for each page submitted with any color other than black).
· No background color on any page is acceptable. A five (5) point penalty will assessed for each page that contains a background color.
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Write in third person voice (he, she, it, the company, etc.) only.
Do not use first person (I, we, and us) or second person (you, them) voice.
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Your content MUST be broken into paragraphs. The first line of all paragraphs should be indented. Whole blocks of type are not acceptable.
· Numbers 10 or larger, type the number. Less than 10, type the word (one, two, etc.)
· Financial figures are to be written as $50 (not fifty dollars); $1,500 (not one thousand, five hundred dollars); $1M (not one million dollars); $3.2B (not three billion, two hundred million dollars).
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Never
end your sentence with a preposition like ‘to, from, by, with, between, before, after or during’. (E.g. The company could not have anticipated where the threat came from.)
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Always use italics for the name of a source (magazine, book or newspaper title) e.g.
Wall St. Journal.
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NEVER use the words ‘sticking’ (instead use ‘placing’ or ‘inserting’ the product into the market); ‘everyone’ (no product appeals to/or is used by everyone-ever!), ‘stocks’ (it is ‘stock’) or ‘came up with’ (use ‘developed’).
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Always capitalize the first letter of proper names.
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Text MUST be double spaced. A 5-point penalty per page not double spaced.